Your electrons are filthy.
1. The sun's long down and I'm listening to Tom Waits's "Warm Beer and Cold Women," the window open and a cool-cool breeze drifting on by. Originally, "The Hotel Detective" had a scene in a hotel bar with Frank Sinatra playing on the jukebox but this is better, worn-out and hopeless. Fits the scene a bit better. Although, perhaps, "What's he building in there" would be a better choice for the overall theme of the story.
2. First draft's finished, by the by. Clocks in at 40 pages, 12,310 words. It needs a lot of work, but revision is where the art is, where the style is, where the slickness is. It's where you make the words work for you. Or you figure out what to feed your baby, whichever. I have a lot of underutilized characters, a couple unseen ones who are relatively important and I need to figure out if they are important enough to bring out into the light.
3. Right now, revision is notes, questions, bits of song lyrics and random poetry. Anything that might spark up a new way of looking at a character or a scene. I need to work in the strange old man, wandering around and asking for a bible over and over. The moths. Insects and lizards recur as images, so I need to build them up a bit.
4. The solution's a bit ridiculous, of course, but I've always had a habit of liking really esoteric mysteries.
5. Today was an expedition up island to investigate some wineries. Well, four wineries and a ciderie. Christian and Lisa provided a very extavagant picnic and we all enjoyed it a lot. It was nice to blow the city's popsicle stand and zoom off in the big van, fresh with Sunday dripping upon our heads, having drips and drabs of wines and ciders. Picked up a couple bottles, including a blackberry port-- perfect for the dinner club nights.
