Current word count is: 4754.
Mostly the problem is those brief, exhilarating moments where the ideas sputter and you're left with a blank line waiting to be filled, occasionally even halfway through a sentence, only then you fill it and keep on going. I'm unsure if the violence was well-written enough, but this is just a draft.
I think I'm going to take a scene and flesh out the main character a bit more; yes, it's time for a flashback, maybe. Or something. It also gives me a chance to flesh out her family a bit more, as they're only mentioned indirectly rather than appearing, so far.